Damien sat in silence, his fingers rhythmically tapping against the armrest as his mind raced. He wasn't just planning to kill them—no, that would be too merciful. He wanted them to feel despair. He wanted them to believe, even for a fleeting moment, that they were safe… only to have that illusion violently ripped away.
Hope, then destruction. That was the plan.
He would break them mentally, emotionally, and spiritually before dealing the final blow. Letting them die with a smile was not an option.
Slow death. Lingering suffering.
And all of it under the radar. No cops. No investigations. No trails. He had to make sure their ends were delivered with precision and finality. A plan started to form in his mind, the pieces aligning one by one like a deadly puzzle.
A wicked grin crept across his face.
Without wasting another second, Damien stood and made his way to his room. The door closed with a quiet click behind him.
He muttered a single word:
"Feed."
In an instant, a dark aura surged around him like a cloak of pure malice. It pulsed and coiled with malevolent energy, wrapping around his body in tendrils of black mist. A familiar voice echoed in his mind.
"Done."
Damien was still grinning when the system's notification rang out:
DING!
⚠️ 1/3 TRIES, 0/3 JUDGEMENTS.
Damien clicked his tongue in frustration.
"Seriously?" he muttered.
The system clearly wasn't satisfied with his approach. Maybe it wanted something more personal. Maybe it wanted him to kill them face to face.
Fine, he thought. Why not give it a shot?
He already knew where they were. He'd tracked their movements for weeks, memorized their routines, and even predicted how they would react in a crisis.
It was time to pay them a visit.
WIVES' POV
When we heard about the disappearance of the eighth wife, panic set in almost immediately.
We'd always stayed in touch, constantly checking in with each other through private channels—just in case something like this happened. So when she stopped responding, we knew something was wrong.
There was no more pretending. No more waiting.
It was time to regroup.
We gathered all of our children, bundling them up in a rush, and moved to a predetermined safe house. It wasn't perfect, but it was isolated and secure—or so we thought.
Huddled in the living room, tension thick in the air, we tried to calm our sons and stay alert. A thin sense of safety settled in… until the silence was shattered by the slow, creaking sound of the front door opening.
Our breath caught.
We turned.
The door was opening.
BACK TO DAMIEN
Damien crept toward the entrance of the nearest safe house the wives had retreated to. His movements were slow, deliberate. He wanted to savor this moment, the calm before the storm.
He reached for the handle and gently turned it, opening the door just enough to slip inside.
But what met him was not what he expected.
All the wives—and their sons—were standing there, staring at him with wide eyes.
He blinked.
"What the hell?"
He had never understood how they all managed to give birth to boys. For years, it was one of the many strange mysteries he had tried to solve. Pills? Genetic manipulation? Some secret doctor?
He shook his head. None of that mattered right now.
The time for questions was over.
Black lightning exploded from his body, cracking through the air with a sharp, electric hiss. His figure blurred, and in the next instant, he lunged toward the nearest wife.
The blow landed hard, sending her flying across the room.
DING!
⚠️ 2/3 TRIES, 0/3 JUDGEMENTS.
Damien's chest heaved slightly.
Still no judgment score.
"I'm going to the Gods' Plane either way now..." he muttered under his breath, frustration bubbling to the surface.
He wasn't going to win this round. But if he was going down, he was at least going to make a statement.
The black lightning dispersed, fading into the air like smoke.
This time, he used a normal punch, driving his fist into another wife's gut. She cried out, doubling over, but he wasn't done. Damien followed up with a brutal series of kicks, slamming them into her midsection without pause or mercy.
She gasped and wheezed, collapsing to her knees, but he wasn't finished.
He grabbed her by the throat and began choking her, watching the light in her eyes dim.
The rest of them?
They stood frozen, like statues. Shocked into silence.
Cowards.
Damien released his grip and let her crumple to the floor.
Then, the final system message rang out.
DING!
⚠️ MISSION "JUDGMENT DAY" FAILED.
▶ MISSION REWARD: NULL
▶ PUNISHMENT: GODS' PLANE TRANSPORTING IN... 3… 2… 1…
Damien clenched his jaw.
He hadn't expected to win. But the confirmation still stung.
Before he vanished, he raised a single hand and extended his middle finger.
"Fuck you," he said, staring directly at the frozen faces of the wives.
And then—
He disappeared.
Gone before he could see their reactions.
Gone, headed toward the Gods' Plane...
Where a new nightmare awaited.
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Damien sat in silence, his fingers rhythmically tapping against the armrest as his mind raced. He wasn't just planning to kill them—no, that would be too merciful. He wanted them to feel despair. He wanted them to believe, even for a fleeting moment, that they were safe… only to have that illusion violently ripped away.
Hope, then destruction. That was the plan.
He would break them mentally, emotionally, and spiritually before dealing the final blow. Letting them die with a smile was not an option.
Slow death. Lingering suffering.
And all of it under the radar. No cops. No investigations. No trails. He had to make sure their ends were delivered with precision and finality. A plan started to form in his mind, the pieces aligning one by one like a deadly puzzle.
A wicked grin crept across his face.
Without wasting another second, Damien stood and made his way to his room. The door closed with a quiet click behind him.
He muttered a single word:
"Feed."
In an instant, a dark aura surged around him like a cloak of pure malice. It pulsed and coiled with malevolent energy, wrapping around his body in tendrils of black mist. A familiar voice echoed in his mind.
"Done."
Damien was still grinning when the system's notification rang out:
DING!
⚠️ 1/3 TRIES, 0/3 JUDGEMENTS.
Damien clicked his tongue in frustration.
"Seriously?" he muttered.
The system clearly wasn't satisfied with his approach. Maybe it wanted something more personal. Maybe it wanted him to kill them face to face.
Fine, he thought. Why not give it a shot?
He already knew where they were. He'd tracked their movements for weeks, memorized their routines, and even predicted how they would react in a crisis.
It was time to pay them a visit.
WIVES' POV
When we heard about the disappearance of the eighth wife, panic set in almost immediately.
We'd always stayed in touch, constantly checking in with each other through private channels—just in case something like this happened. So when she stopped responding, we knew something was wrong.
There was no more pretending. No more waiting.
It was time to regroup.
We gathered all of our children, bundling them up in a rush, and moved to a predetermined safe house. It wasn't perfect, but it was isolated and secure—or so we thought.
Huddled in the living room, tension thick in the air, we tried to calm our sons and stay alert. A thin sense of safety settled in… until the silence was shattered by the slow, creaking sound of the front door opening.
Our breath caught.
We turned.
The door was opening.
BACK TO DAMIEN
Damien crept toward the entrance of the nearest safe house the wives had retreated to. His movements were slow, deliberate. He wanted to savor this moment, the calm before the storm.
He reached for the handle and gently turned it, opening the door just enough to slip inside.
But what met him was not what he expected.
All the wives—and their sons—were standing there, staring at him with wide eyes.
He blinked.
"What the hell?"
He had never understood how they all managed to give birth to boys. For years, it was one of the many strange mysteries he had tried to solve. Pills? Genetic manipulation? Some secret doctor?
He shook his head. None of that mattered right now.
The time for questions was over.
Black lightning exploded from his body, cracking through the air with a sharp, electric hiss. His figure blurred, and in the next instant, he lunged toward the nearest wife.
The blow landed hard, sending her flying across the room.
DING!
⚠️ 2/3 TRIES, 0/3 JUDGEMENTS.
Damien's chest heaved slightly.
Still no judgment score.
"I'm going to the Gods' Plane either way now..." he muttered under his breath, frustration bubbling to the surface.
He wasn't going to win this round. But if he was going down, he was at least going to make a statement.
The black lightning dispersed, fading into the air like smoke.
This time, he used a normal punch, driving his fist into another wife's gut. She cried out, doubling over, but he wasn't done. Damien followed up with a brutal series of kicks, slamming them into her midsection without pause or mercy.
She gasped and wheezed, collapsing to her knees, but he wasn't finished.
He grabbed her by the throat and began choking her, watching the light in her eyes dim.
The rest of them?
They stood frozen, like statues. Shocked into silence.
Cowards.
Damien released his grip and let her crumple to the floor.
Then, the final system message rang out.
DING!
⚠️ MISSION "JUDGMENT DAY" FAILED.
▶ MISSION REWARD: NULL
▶ PUNISHMENT: GODS' PLANE TRANSPORTING IN... 3… 2… 1…
Damien clenched his jaw.
He hadn't expected to win. But the confirmation still stung.
Before he vanished, he raised a single hand and extended his middle finger.
"Fuck you," he said, staring directly at the frozen faces of the wives.
And then—
He disappeared.
Gone before he could see their reactions.
Gone headed to the Gods plane
Where a new nightmare awaited